Story Board Treatment - Version 1

(Long camera shot - shows the girls walking towards the gate - front on)It was a normal sunny afternoon at St Hilda’s School and three friends walked towards the bus stop talking excitedly about what they were doing on the weekend.
(Close up on Jane) “Jack and I are going to spend all of Saturday at Movieworld and then on Sunday I’m going to the movies with my family,” Jane giggled with enthusiasm.
(Close up on Anne) “Really? I’m just hanging at home and catching up on my reading,” Anne said as she adjusted her glasses. Emily scoffed at Anne’s comment before she froze.
(Close up on Emily) “I forgot my English book! I’ll be right back!” Emily yelled as she spun around and bolted towards the top left classroom in Davenport (Long shot - shows Jane and Anne standing there while Emily runs off). Emily runs up the stairs by skipping two stairs at a time. She runs into the classroom and opens the cupboard door. (Medium length shot slightly tinted upwards) She bent down and opened at bag before she grinned.
“Got it,” she said happily. (Long shot to her side) She kicks the bag back into the cupboard and closes the door. (Front on view - goes from a long shot to a medium shot) She turns around as her eyes widened in fear and all sound/music stop. Her piercing scream is heard for a short moment before she is stricken down with a knife. (Medium shot tinted upwards so it only shows the top half of the murderer striking the in again and again) The murderer kept stabbing and stabbing her until the body was only just recognisable (The attendance will not see the murder stab her, they will see the murder striking something and the sounds that are happening). The murderer stood up before they (Behind the murderer - long shot) opened the cupboard door and kicked the body into the cupboard. The murderer turns around and walks towards the camera (camera zooms into until it goes black).
(Medium view of Jane - her upper body with her arms crossed)“Emily sure is taking her sweet time,” Jane said as she looked over at Anne (Pans upwards from Anne’s feet to her face) who was leaning against one of the brick poles.
“She sure is...let’s go get her,” Anne said with a long sigh. (Long shot - backs of Jane and Anne) Jane and Anne make their way towards the Davenport classrooms.
(Medium shot - shows Jane talking to Anne at the bottom of the Davenport stairs)“I’ll go check the classroom where she has maths, you check her classroom,” Jane ordered. Anne nodded and walks away. Jane slowly walked up the stairs and into the Emily’s classroom.
(Medium shot) “Hey Em, you here?” Jane asked bored.
“I’ll take that as a no,” Jane turned around and a knife strikes her. She hits the ground and all the viewer can see is the knife being struck down again and again (Switches between scenes of the body moving from the force of the blows to the murderer striking).
(Switches from the murderer to Anne then back to the murderer)“Hey Jane, did you find her,” Anne yelled as she walked towards the classroom. (Long shot - never shows the body)The murderer quickly tosses the body into the cupboard and dashes out of the classroom. (Long shot)Anne walks into the classroom and doesn’t see anyone. She turns around and walks out of the classroom. Standing at the other end of the hallway is the murderer (Long shot - Anne doesn’t know).
“Excuse me sir, have you seen two girls around here?” Anne asked. (Long shot of the murderer)The murderer slowly walks towards her and Anne doesn’t move. Anne noticed something (Close up) red fall from their hand and she looks at their hand. (Close up of Anne’s face)She sees the bloody knife and she steps back (Long shot). The murderer rans towards her (Medium shot) with the knife raised. (Close up)Anne screams but it’s muted.
(Medium shot) Anne sat up in her bed and gasped loudly. (Pans out as she looks around) She frantically looks around her room before she sighs.
“It was just a dream,” she said happily as she picked up her phone and started texting. (Pans across the room - so the viewer is looking into the room) However, unknown to Anne, (Close up on a hand with a bloody knife - Anne can be seen in the background texting in her bed) their was someone at her bedroom door.
(Goes to black and a scream is heard)

This is version one of my story board treatment (not final version)

Storyboard Treatment

In a crowded church, a bald man calmly lends against the rail while he carefully surveys a white haired man. The church bells ring loudly and echo throughout the church and the male choir sing passionately. The white haired man pauses as he catches the bald man watching him. The choir starts singing louder and the white haired narrows his eyes on the bald man. The choir starts singing softer and the bald man stands up.
“She…has returned,” the bald man said as he walked pasted the white haired man. The white man’s eyes widened in a mixture of fear and regret while a man off in the distance watches the scene happen from a high balcony with slight interest. The choir gets louder as the white man falls to his knees and tears drip from his eyes. The man watching from the high balcony turns around and walks away.

Planning for Storyboard

Genre: Horror

Time line
1. Starts with group of girls (3) leaving school one late afternoon
2. One of the girls forget something so she quickly goes gets it
3. Has the scene where the girl goes to get it and then someone is behind her and stabs her
4. Her friends go and find her after she doesn’t return for a while
5. The girls split up and go look for her
6. One of the girls is looking and hears something behind her.
7. She turns around and gets stab by the murder
8. The other girl turns around and thinks she hears something
9. Ignores and keeps walking
10. Have the girl turn around and the person raise the knife to stab her
11. Have the girl sat up in her bed and think it’s a dream
12. The girl goes back to sleep and have the last scene where there is someone in her room with a blood stained knife

Characters
Jane – Forgets her maths books. First victim
Emily – Second Victim
Anne – Third Victim. Wakes up in bed

Settings/Locations
-Bus stop gate
-Davenport
-A bedroom

5-point plan
1. Girls are about to leave school when Jane goes back to gets her books.
2. Jane is killed and the others go to try and find her (they don’t know she is killed).
3. Emily and Anne split up. Emily is killed and Anne heads into unknown danger.
4. Anne opens the door and finds the bodies of her friends. Turns around and screams in horror as she sees someone raise the bloody knife.
5. Anne wakes up in her bed and shows someone with a bloody knife at the bedroom door.

Hero's Journey

Departure

1. The Call to Adventure
   The call to adventure is the point in a person's life when they are first given notice that everything is going to change, whether they know it or not.
2. Refusal of the Call
   Often when the call is given, the future hero refuses to heed it. This may be from a sense of duty or obligation, fear, insecurity, a sense of inadequacy, or any of a range of reasons that work to hold the person in his or her current circumstances.
3. Supernatural Aid
   Once the hero has committed to the quest, consciously or unconsciously, his or her guide and magical helper appears, or becomes known.
4. The Crossing of the First Threshold
   This is the point where the person actually crosses into the field of adventure, leaving the known limits of his or her world and venturing into an unknown and dangerous realm where the rules and limits are not known.
5. The Belly of the Whale
   The belly of the whale represents the final separation from the hero's known world and self. It is sometimes described as the person's lowest point, but it is actually the point when the person is between or transitioning between worlds and selves. The separation has been made, or is being made, or being fully recognized between the old world and old self and the potential for a new world/self. The experiences that will shape the new world and self will begin shortly, or may be beginning with this experience which is often symbolized by something dark, unknown and frightening. By entering this stage, the person shows their willingness to undergo a metamorphosis, to die to him or herself.

Initiation

1. The Road of Trials
   The road of trials is a series of tests, tasks, or ordeals that the person must undergo to begin the transformation. Often the person fails one or more of these tests, which often occur in threes.
2. The Meeting with the Goddess
   The meeting with the goddess represents the point in the adventure when the person experiences a love that has the power and significance of the all-powerful, all encompassing, unconditional love that a fortunate infant may experience with his or her mother. It is also known as the "hieros gamos", or sacred marriage, the union of opposites, and may take place entirely within the person. In other words, the person begins to see him or herself in a non-dualistic way. This is a very important step in the process and is often represented by the person finding the other person that he or she loves most completely. Although Campbell symbolizes this step as a meeting with a goddess, unconditional love and /or self unification does not have to be represented by a woman.
3. Woman as the Temptress
   At one level, this step is about those temptations that may lead the hero to abandon or stray from his or her quest, which as with the Meeting with the Goddess does not necessarily have to be represented by a woman. For Campbell, however, this step is about the revulsion that the usually male hero may feel about his own fleshy/earthy nature, and the subsequent attachment or projection of that revulsion to women. Woman is a metaphor for the physical or material temptations of life, since the hero-knight was often tempted by lust from his spiritual journey.
4. Atonement with the Father
   In this step the person must confront and be initiated by whatever holds the ultimate power in his or her life. In many myths and stories this is the father, or a father figure who has life and death power. This is the center point of the journey. All the previous steps have been moving in to this place, all that follow will move out from it. Although this step is most frequently symbolized by an encounter with a male entity, it does not have to be a male; just someone or thing with incredible power. For the transformation to take place, the person as he or she has been must be "killed" so that the new self can come into being. Sometime this killing is literal, and the earthly journey for that character is either over or moves into a different realm.
5. Apotheosis
   To apotheosize is to deify. When someone dies a physical death, or dies to the self to live in spirit, he or she moves beyond the pairs of opposites to a state of divine knowledge, love, compassion and bliss. This is a god-like state; the person is in heaven and beyond all strife. A more mundane way of looking at this step is that it is a period of rest, peace and fulfillment before the hero begins the return.
6. The Ultimate Boon
   The ultimate boon is the achievement of the goal of the quest. It is what the person went on the journey to get. All the previous steps serve to prepare and purify the person for this step, since in many myths the boon is something transcendent like the elixir of life itself, or a plant that supplies immortality, or the holy grail.

Return

1. Refusal of the Return
   So why, when all has been achieved, the ambrosia has been drunk, and we have conversed with the gods, why come back to normal life with all its cares and woes?
2. The Magic Flight
   Sometimes the hero must escape with the boon, if it is something that the gods have been jealously guarding. It can be just as adventurous and dangerous returning from the journey as it was to go on it.
3. Rescue from Without
   Just as the hero may need guides and assistants to set out on the quest, often times he or she must have powerful guides and rescuers to bring them back to everyday life, especially if the person has been wounded or weakened by the experience. Or perhaps the person doesn't realize that it is time to return, that they can return, or that others need their boon.
4. The Crossing of the Return Threshold
   The trick in returning is to retain the wisdom gained on the quest, to integrate that wisdom into a human life, and then maybe figure out how to share the wisdom with the rest of the world. This is usually extremely difficult.
5. Master of the Two Worlds
   In myth, this step is usually represented by a transcendental hero like Jesus or Buddha. For a human hero, it may mean achieving a balance between the material and spiritual. The person has become comfortable and competent in both the inner and outer worlds.
6. Freedom to Live
   Mastery leads to freedom from the fear of death, which in turn is the freedom to live. This is sometimes referred to as living in the moment, neither anticipating the future nor regretting the past.
   

Take From: http://www.mcli.dist.maricopa.edu/smc/journey/ref/summary.html